Pantoum (Original)

Drinking too much.

Making dumb decisions.

Costing my life,

and taking the lives of others,

Making dumb decisions.

Getting into the driver’s seat,

and taking the lives of others.

I thought I was fine.

Getting into the driver’s seat,

everything hazy and unclear.

I thought I was fine,  

beeping and honking surround me.

Everything hazy and unclear,

twisting and turning the wheel.

Beeping and honking surround me,

my eyes closing.    

Twisting and turning the wheel,

hitting something and jolting forward.

My eyes closing,

and I can’t breathe.

Hitting something and jolting forward.

Sirens consuming me,

and I can’t breathe.

I sit there motionless.

Sirens consuming me,

I close my eyes.

I sit there motionless.

Repetitive sounds of monitors in my ears.

I close my eyes,

Peaceful and quiet state of mind.

Repetitive sounds of monitors in my ears,

everything falls silent.

Pantoum (Final)

Drinking too much.

Making dumb decisions.

Costing my life,

and taking the lives of others.

Making dumb decisions.

Getting into the driver’s seat,

and taking the lives of others.

Hesitant of my surroundings.

Getting into the driver’s seat,

everything is hazy and unclear.

Hesitant of my surroundings,

beeping and honking all around.

Everything is hazy and unclear.

I twist and turn the wheel.

Beeping and honking all around,

drifting to sleep.  

I twist and turn the wheel,

hitting something and jolting forward.

Drifting to sleep,
my heartbeat diminishing.

Hitting something and jolting forward,

Sirens consuming me.

My heartbeat diminishing,

I sit there motionless.

Sirens consuming me,

shouts and screams of doctors.

I sit there motionless,

ringing monitors in my ears.

Shouts and screams of doctors.

Clinging onto the little life I have left,

ringing monitors in my ears,

and nothing is to be felt.

Clinging onto the little life I have left,

I close my eyes.

Nothing is to be felt, 

and everything begins to fall silent. 

Dirge: (Original)

As people gather around,

the details of your causality become expound.

Sounds of sobbing fill the small room,

as you sit motionless in the tomb.

Remembering the small details of your face,

this tragedy has become a disgrace.

The millions of memories we had,

recalling all of them and becoming sad. 

You don’t deserve this,

the sadness overpowering me has me feeling like I’m stuck in an abyss.

You were young and had a life to live,

these are the events I will always remember and relive. 

Dirge: (Final)

As people gather around,

the details of your causality become expound.

Sounds of weeping people fill the small populated room,

as you sit motionless in the tomb.

Remembering the small details of your face,

this tragedy has turned into a disgrace.

The infinitive amount of memories we had,

recalling all of them and becoming sad. 

I will miss you more and more every day,

you were happy and beamed like a sun ray.

You were young and had a life to live,

these are the events that I will always remember and relive.  

Triolet: (original)

An unbreakable bond,

lovers, friends, family.

They help us and beyond,

an unbreakable bond.

Surrounded by happiness,

forever making us smile.

An unbreakable bond,

lovers, friends, family.

Triolet: (final)

An unbreakable bond,

lovers, friends, family.

They mentor us and beyond,

an unbreakable bond.

Ringed with bliss,

endlessly making us smile.

An unbreakable bond,

lovers, friends, family. 

 Different Tones

 The dreaded 5:50 alarm clock startles me while I'm dead asleep. I have no motivation to get out of bed and actually get ready. Getting dressed, brushing my teeth, showering, putting on makeup, packing my bag, and sitting in a classroom for 7 hours is nothing I want to do. The whole day i just stare at the clock hoping a miracle will happen and the last bell of the day will ring and i get to go home. All I want to do is sleep and snuggle up with my dogs. School is like being in a prison. I want nothing to do with it.

    The 5:50 alarm clock wakes me up and I can't wait to get up. I hop out of bed more excited than ever to get ready. Getting dressed, brushing my teeth, showering, putting on makeup, packing my bag, and learning for 7 hours is everything I wish to do today. I want to learn new things. I stare at the clock hoping the day won't end. The thought of a new school day gets me more excited for the next day to start.

Distillation

In the AP English Literature and Composition passage, the narrator establishes a subjective tone towards scientists by switching point of views, detailed imagery, and degrading diction. Throughout the narrator switches from first person to second person while using harsh words like “cruel nastiness” with the use of imagery to suggest a tone of unhappiness and negativity. The bitter tone implies that the narrator doesn’t approve of the scientists experimenting on the insects and that they should stop the cruel and inhumane acts on them. This passage was made for the narrator to address his views on scientists jobs being useless compared to people who actually have to work for their living and the harm they are causing to the environment.